Engelse Brief
 

Hey, ik moet morgen in de klas een engelse brief maken over een opdracht in het boek. We hebben al eens een brief geschreven en die mag ik gebruiken.
Mar dan moet ik hem wel goed maken
Dus als iemand fouten of verbeteringen ziet?
Graag ff melden :)


De brief:


Putterstraat 7
5022 BW Tilburg
The Netherlands

7nd October, 2003

Dear Parmjit,

I read your letter in “A problem shared?” and I think I can help you with your problem. Your problem, which is in every country on the world, is that your getting teased because of your origin.
In my country (the Netherlands) foreigners are being teased because of how they dress themselves, or because of their external and such other things.
I think that you don’t have to have this all, you have to stand up for yourself and don’t let them laugh about you. Say you had enough!
You could say it directly against the ones who tease you or you could talk about it with someone from school or a good friend or someone who you really trust.
If you do this, which I think you have to, I think they won’t tease you anymore.

Best wishes,

Jeffrey Menkehorst


Dus kom maar op met je tips, fouten en verbeteringen :D

Putterstraat 7
5022 BW Tilburg
The Netherlands

7nd October, 2003

Dear Parmjit,

I read your letter in “A problem shared?” and I think I can help you with your problem. Your problem, that exists in every country off othe world , is that your getting teased because of your origin.
In my country (the Netherlands) foreigners are being teased because of the way they dress themselves , or because of their external and so forth.
I think you don’t have to take this all, you have to stand up for yourself and don’t let them laugh about you. Say you had enough!
You could say it directly to the ones who tease you or you could talk about it with someone from school, a good friend or someone who you really trust.
When you do this, which I think you have to, I think they won’t tease you anymore.

Best wishes,

Jeffrey Menkehorst



Ik heb het op mijn gevoel gedaan en de stukken die niet klonken en beetje anders geschreven

Mijn verbeteringen:


Putterstraat 7
5022 BW Tilburg
The Netherlands

7th of October, 2003

Dear Parmjit,

In "A problem shared?" I read your letter and I think that I can help you with your problem. Your problem that exists in every country of the world, is that your getting teased (zou je nu wel plagen gebruiken? Klikt zo "soft") because of your origin.
In my country, the Netherlands, foreigners are being teased because the way they dress themselves, or because of their external ( :confused: uiterlijk, bedoel je?) and such other things.
I think that you don’t have to have this all ( :confused: wat bedoel je precies?), you have to stand up for yourself (of: "your rights") and don’t allow them to laugh at you. Say you had enough!
You could say it directly to the ones who tease you or you could talk about it with someone from school or a good friend or someone you really trust.
If you do this, which I think you have to, I think they won’t tease you anymore.

Best wishes,

Ik zou 'm zo schrijven:


Dear Parmjit,

In "A problem shared?" I read your letter and I think that I can help you with your problem. Your problem, that exists in every country in the world, is that you're being bullyd/ picked on because of your origin.
In my country, the Netherlands, foreigners are being bullyd/picked on because of the way they dress, the way they look and such other things.
I think that you don’t have to put up with all this, you have to stand up for yourself and don’t allow them to laugh at you. Say you've had enough!
You can say it directly to the bullys or you could talk about it with someone from school, a good friend or someone you really trust.
If you do this, and I think you have to, I think they'll stop picking on you.

Best wishes,

Thnx Noeke, Gatara en Marlies
Met jullie verbeteringen heb ik nu de volgende brief gemaakt.
Dus als je kijkt naar
- spelling
- grammatica
- inhoud

+ to what extent do you recognise parmjit's problem in your country?
+ what is your opinion of how Parmjit deals with her problem
+ what advice can you give her


De brief:

Dear Parmjit,

In "A problem shared?" I read your letter and I think that I can help you with your problem. Your problem, that exists in every country in the world, is that you’re being bullyd because of your origin.

In my country (the Netherlands) foreigners are being picked on because of the way they dress themselves, the way they look and such other things.

I think that you don’t have to put up with all this, you have to stand up for your rights and don’t allow them to laugh at you. Say you've had enough!

You could say it directly to the bullys or you could talk about it with someone from school, a good friend or someone you really trust.
If you do this, and I think you have to, I think they'll stop picking on you.

Best wishes,

Jeffrey Menkehorst


Dus wat vinden jullie ervan als je kijkt naar spelling grammatica en de bovenvernoemde inhoud?

Is het niet ipv bullys bullies en bullyd > bullied?

De brief:

Dear Parmjit,

I read your letter in "A Problem Shared" and I think I can help you with your problem. Your problem, that exists in every country in the world, is that you are being bullied because of your origin.

*knip, klopt allemaal wel*

You could say it directly to the bullies or you could talk about it with somebody at school, a good friend or someone you really trust.
If you do this, and I think you have to, I think they'll stop picking on you.

Best wishes,

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Ik zou het gebruik van samentrekkingen vermijden (bijv. they will i.p.v. they'll)

uhm dat is een goede...
volgens mij is het bullied
dus da verander ik nog ff
en bullies

maar verder
inhoud goed?
nog andere fouten?

:D :confused: :eek:

Denk dat t wel goed is zo.

Nog een paar foutjes
ik zal ze niet allemaal eruit vissen
maar dan weet je dat tenminste
because of your origin
I think they'll stop picking on you
In "A problem shared?" I read your letter (zinsvolgorde)
en er zitten er nog her en der een klein foutje
succes drmee
ow trouwens, Juliah had gelijk

Zeg dan ook wat er fout aan is.
Ik zie t niet?



Ja, dat moet andersom :o Mijn fout :bloos:

I read your letter in "A Problem Shared"

In "A Problem Shared", I read your letter


Kan allebei. Ik zou gaan voor mogelijkheid 1.

Ik heb het zo geleerd op school dat je dus niet! :nono: They'll ofzo mocht gebruiken in een brief moet je altijd voluit schrijven (tenminsten zo moeten wij dat doen op mijn school!!) i'm word dan ook i am enz....

Ohja, dat wordt inderdaad aangeraden. :)

Maar in een persoonlijke brief hoef dat niet. Maar dit is een iets formelere brief.

Ik moest het bij een formele brief en informele brief doen!...weet nie hoe het precies zit, ik doe gewoon hoe mij het verteld wordt!

I read your letter in "A Problem Shared"

In "A Problem Shared", I read your letter

1e is goed normaal engels,
2e is meer voor gesproken taal, zal je niet of nauwlijks tegenkomen in (formele) brieven

because of your origin (origin klopt niet)
I think they'll stop picking on you (klopt niet in combinatie met de rest van de zin, het loopt gewoon niet)

ik mag in beide gevallen gewoon dingen als I'm, they're en I'll gebruiken. Alleen afkortingen die duidelijk informeel zijn mogen niet, zoals 'cus ofzo (als je because wil schrijven. Kzou niet eens weten hoe de afkorting daarvan precies is)