Since the day you came to put things right
till the day that you were out of my sight

i can still remember each and every single line
that came from your sweet lips as a rhyme

from the first phrase untill this bitter end
both thinking about that day we've never spent

maybe it were me who'd never asked you for a dance
or you were always scared to give me just one chance

still in the some old dream i have every night
your hand slowly touches mine and i awake with fright

i've tried to ban you from my head and even from my heart
but i know that if i could relive my life you'd still be a part

i've tried so very hard not to go to sleep anymore
but now you even come through every window and every door...

Ik vind hem cool, loopt redelijk, en is leuk om te lezen...

from the first phrase till this bitter end
both thinking about that day we've never spent

Dit vind ik jammer, haalt me uit het ritme... je kan er zowiezo until van maken...

Ik vind het jammer dat het zo "gerijmd" is... het is een beetje te geforceerd... Inhoud gedicht is een beetje vaagjes, maar ook wel weer duidelijk... uhm ja dus

:D rupsje

normaal heb ik ook de gewoonte om ze langer te maken :D

Dankje voor dat laatste :)