help engels verhaal
 

wil iemand dit verhaal a.u.b. nakijken ? ik ben niet zo goed in engels :bloos:


I have a little sister and a brother and a mother and a father

By dinner my sister and my mother have always a discussion, and my

father is not at home because he is at work. My little sister sit in the first

class in secondary school and now she has a lot of homework, but

according to my mother she doesn’t plan her homework very good.

Every evening it is always the same song. My mother says to my little

Sister, have you finished your homework ? why do you ask that ? I am not

a baby. I only have to do my mathematics says my sister. When you

haven’t finished your homework, you don’t go to swim says my mother.

I look to my brother and he looks to me and we know enough...

But I can also make make my homework when I come back, says my

sister. No you can’t.. you’re very tired when you come back.

Then my sister become angry. I go to swim... and when I come back I

make my mathematics. I look to my brother and he looks to me and we

understand eachother. My sister has managed it.

hij is volgens mij bijna helemaal goed (ik ben ook niet al te goed in engels maar ik kon het proberen, omdat ik zag dat nog niemand gereageerd had)

de enige fout die ik kon vinden is: My little sister sit. Dat moet volgens mij My little sister sits zijn
voor de rest dacht ik dat hij goed was maar misschien kan nog iemand er beter even naar kijken ;)

Nou, het is eigenlijk best wel slecht, sorry. Grootste probleem is dat het erop lijkt dat je het letterlijk uit het Nederlands hebt vertaald, en dat kan nou eenmaal niet. Ik kan wel wat proberen te verbeteren maar veel zin heeft het niet ben ik bang. Het is gewoon een slecht stukje. Sowieso moet je er wat leestekens in gooien, zo is het niet te lezen. En waarom steeds een regel ertussen?


"I have a little sister and a brother and a mother and a father"
Gooi al die ands eruit.
"By dinner"
At dinner.
"my sister and my mother have always a discussion, and my father is not at home because he is at work."
Sowieso is het always have, maar wat bedoel je met discussion? Dat ze discussieren of dat ze ruzie hebben? In het tweede geval is het an argument.
"My little sister sit in the first class in secondary school"
Dat zeg je niet in het Engels. "My little sister attends the first class of secondary school" is beter.
"and now she has a lot of homework, but according to my mother she doesn’t plan her homework very good. Every evening it is always the same song."
Is niet fout, maar klinkt niet mooi.
"My mother says to my little Sister, have you finished your homework ?"
Ze vraagt het, dus asks. En zeg liever "Did you do your homework".
"why do you ask that ? I am not a baby. I only have to do my mathematics says my sister."
Niet mooi.
"When you haven’t finished your homework, you don’t go to swim says my mother. "
You can't go swimming. Eerste gedeelte is ook niet mooi.
"I look to my brother and he looks to me and we know enough..."
Look at.
"But I can also make make my homework when I come back, says my sister."
Do homework.
"No you can’t.. you’re very tired when you come back."
You will be very tired.
"Then my sister become angry."
Becomes. Maar is niet mooi. Gets is beter.
"I go to swim... and when I come back I make my mathematics."
Swimming. I'll do.
"I look to my brother and he looks to me and we understand eachother."
Look at. Maar het is een kutzin.
"My sister has managed it"
Klinkt voor geen meter.

egt heel erg bedankt (y)*O*

*ik geef hieronder de tekst met de nodige correcties weer*

I have a younger sister, a brother, a mother and a father

During dinner my sister and my mother are always quarrelling, and my

father is not at home because he is at work. My younger sister is in the first

class in secondary school and now she has a lot of homework, but

according to my mother she doesn’t plan her homework very well.

Every evening it is always the same song. My mother asks my younger sister: "Have you finished your homework?"
"Why do you ask that? I am not a baby. I only have to do my mathematics homework", my sister says.
"When you haven’t finished your homework, you can’t go swimming", my mother says.

My brother and I look at each other, knowing enough...

"But I can also do my homework when I come back", my sister says.
"No you can’t.. you’re very tired when you come back", my mother says.

Then my sister becomes angry. "I will go swimming... and when I come back I will do my mathematics homework", she says.
My brother and I look at each other in understanding. My sister has managed it again.

Is het niet 'plan very well' ipv very good?

Dat moet inderdaad well in plaats van good zijn. Ik heb het inmiddels gecorrigeerd.

"You'll be very tired", zoals Briseïs al zei. En "My younger sister is in attends the first class".

"Every evening it's always the same song!" --> same story, en haal 'always' weg.

"My sister has managed done it again." klinkt beter.