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Hallo mijn engels is nogal slecht dus wou ik vragen of er iemand zo behulpzaam is om de grammatica fouten er een beetje uit te halen

Alvast heellllll erg bedankt.


Weapon possession in United States

Introduction:
There is no other country in the world so loved but also hated so as the United States. It is the land of extremes. Despite the many shootings in which many citizens and especially teenagers become victims of, gun possession is still not restricted. It is sometimes so bad that when you open a bank account you get a weapon of your choise and a bullet you can buy at a supermarket. Many people give the weapon possession the debt, others find this nonsense. Therefore the various positions in a row.

proponents arms possession:
America is the land of the most murders per capita. There are approximately 22,000 murders committed each year. There are approximately 80,000,000 weapons in circulation. Known incidents involving weapons are those of Columbine High School and later of the University of Virginia where a South Korean 33 people in a school shoot dead. Opponents giving the legal weapon possession the debt. Everyone can get a weapon in America. The bullets can be bought in supermarkets. The many incidents in schools and among young people with weapons find they come by to easy getting these weapons. The weapon lobby is stop this ban and they look to countries like some in Europe and Canada where weapons are not Legal and a lot less murders take place.

opponents arms possession:
Opponents call this nonsense. The Supporters of free gun possession have united themeself and call the changing mentality as a cause of rising murders. Even proponents argue that prohibition of weapon possession is a impossible thing. According to their, take such ban affects the good citizens and the evil will still have come to these weapons. Furthermore, said they that it is a right for citizens to arm themselves and so they can protect their property. So they want that weapon possession is legally remains

Conclusion:
All in all, it seems an endless discussion. Both the parties have their positions clear. The opponents against weapon possession seize the high homicide numbers to the legality of weapons and point to examples of other countries. Proponents of gun possession point to the impossible case of the ban and the right to defend your own. As long as there are murders and weapons they seem never to agree to each other.

De eerste zin zou ik zelf veranderen in iets als:
The United States is the most loved, but also the most hated country in the world.


But that's just me...

inderdaad klinkt stuk beter

Ik heb een poging gewaagd maar je hebt echt zoveel zinnen die onduidelijk zijn waarvan ik niet eens weet wat je er precies mee bedoelt dat ik er echt niet ver mee kom.
Wat ik je wel kan vertellen, iemand de schuld geven vertaal je als 'to blame someone'. Debt betekent schuld als in dat je iemand nog geld schuldig bent bijvoorbeeld.
Ook moet je 'het land Amerika' vertalen als 'the country' en niet 'the land'. 'The land' is namelijk land als in een stuk grond waarop dingen verbouwd of geteelt worden.
Let ook goed op je woordvolgorde, je vertaalt veel dingen letterlijk vanuit het Nederlands, dit is niet correct.

Ik heb ook een poging gewaagd. Bij de vraagtekens heb ik er een hele andere zin van gemaakt waarvan ik niet zeker weet of je dat bedoelde, maar het was zo onduidelijk dat ik niet begreep wat je bedoelde.

Posession of weapons in the United States

Introduction:

The United States is the most loved, but also the most hated country in the world. It's an extreme country. Possession of weapons is still not restricted, despite the many shoot-outs where many people (especially teenagers) became victim of. Sometimes it's so worse that you get a free weapon when you open a bank account. And the bullets you can buy in the local supermarket. Many people blame the possession of weapons, other people don't. That's why I put the various opinions in a row below.

Possesion of weapons from opponents:

The United States is the country that has the most killings per capita. There are about 22,000 killings committed each year and there are about 80,000,000 weapons in circulation. Known incidents with weapons are those at Columbine High School and at the University of Virginia, where a South Korean guy murdered 33 people inside a school. Opponents blame the legal possesion of weapons. Everyone can get a weapon in the United States and the bullets can be bought in local supermarkets. According the opponents that's the reason of the many killings in the United States. The weaponbusiness tries to stop this ban and searches for other countries, for example in Europe and Canada, where even though weapons are illegal a lot of people are killed. Opponents call this nonsense.

Posession of weapons from defenders:

The supporters from free possesion of weapons are united with each other and they call the changing mentality a cause of rising killings. Defenders argue that prohibition from possession of weapons is impossible. They think that, despite of the bans, people will still buy weapons. (?) They say that it is a right for each citizen to protect himself or his property. So they want to keep the possesion of weapons legal. (?)

Conclusion:

All in all, it seems to be an endless discussion. Both groups have their own opinion. The opponents are against posession of weapons, they blame it for the many killings and they want to imitatie countries where weapons are not legal. (?) Defenders from posession of weapons want to keep the right to defend yourself. (?) As long as there are weapons and killings the opponents and the defenders don't seem to agree with each other.

heel erg bedankt!!!!

'worse' moet hier 'bad' zijn. 'worse' betekent 'erger', de vergrotende trap dus.
bad=slecht/erg
worse=slechter/erger
(the)worst=het slechtst/het ergst

Eerlijk gezegd vind ik jouw stukje maar marginaal beter dan de oorspronkelijke tekst.

Laat ik zeggen dat ik het op vmbo niveau heb gehouden, ik weet namelijk niet wat hij voor onderwijs volgt en ga daarom van het makkelijkste uit. Als we alles hier op universitair niveau zouden verbeteren zou niet iedereen het meer begrijpen?

havo
maar engels is dan ook me minste vak ahahah

Ik vertel je wat ik opmerkte. Ik weet niet altijd wat goed is, maar sommige dingen merk ik op.
Samentrekkingen komen in principe niet voor in geschreven teksten.
Jouw Engels is te Nederlands.

Ik weet niet of USA een land is, maar volgens mij is het wel meervoud. Ik zou niet weten of je hier "are" en "countries" moet gebruiken.

Waarnaar verwijst it?(foutieve verwijzing)

Gebruik passive!
Het gebruik van you is fout!
IK open geen bankaccount.
IK koop geen kogels.
Hou het onpersoonlijk! Gebruik de lijdende vorm of people.

Ik heb er niet alle fouten uitgehaald.
Ik weet niet of deze zin beter is:
Dan die zin met worse.
Iets van: "It's even so worse" (worse is overtreffend en met "such" en "that" weet ik het niet zeker.

*ik geef hieronder de tekst met de nodige correcties weer*
Weapon possession in United States

Introduction:
There is no other country in the world so loved but also so hated as the United States. It is a country of extremes. Despite the many shootings of which many citizens and especially teenagers become victims, gun possession is still not restricted. It is sometimes so bad that when opening a bank account one can get a weapon of one's choise and bullets one can buy at a supermarket. Many people put the blame on weapon possession, others find this nonsense. Therefore the various positions in a row.

opponents arms possession:
The United States is the land of the most murders per capita. Approximately 22,000 murders are committed each year. There are approximately 80,000,000 weapons in circulation. Known incidents involving weapons are those at Columbine High School and at the University of Virginia where a South Korean killed 33 people. Opponents put the blame on legal weapon possession. Everyone can get a weapon in the United States. The bullets can be bought at supermarkets. The many incidents in schools and among young people with weapons happen because it is easy getting these weapons. The weapon lobby should not try to stop a ban on weapons. One should look at countries like Canada and some countries in Europe where weapons are not legal and much less murders take place.

proponents arms possession:
Proponents call this nonsense. The supporters of free gun possession have united themeselves and call the changing mentality as a cause of rising murders. Even proponents argue that prohibition of weapon possession is an impossible thing. According to them, such a ban affects the good citizens and the bad ones will still be able to get these weapons. Furthermore, proponents say that it is a right for citizens to arm themselves and so they can protect their property. So they want weapon possession to remain legal.

Conclusion:
All in all, it seems an endless discussion. Both parties made their positions clear. The opponents against weapon possession blame the high homicide numbers on the legality of weapons and point to examples of other countries. Proponents of gun possession point to the impossible case of the ban and the right to defend yourself. As long as there are murders and weapons neither party ever seems to agree with the other one.