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World of warcraft
Some people feel down, but instead going to their doctor or psychologist, some people escape the dearnis of life by gaming online, but why are people gaming such a game as world of warcraft when they feel down? Only to escape the dearnis of life?

Sure, a lot of people plays World of Warcraft to escape the dearnis of life. It’s a massively multiplayer online rol-playing game ( MMORPG). You can make your own characters into a world with a lot of specialities. It’s a world that you can make with your imagination, you’re a whole other person in this imagination.

Mine first impression of world of warcraft is that it’s easy to play, it’s not difficult and you doesn’t need a PC that can runs Crysis, that’s a game where you need a good PC for, however you doesn’t need a good PC to play the game. The graphics of the gamer are quiet good. You’ve also got a lot things to choose out. There’re different varieties, and many quests. You can play these quests with your buddies.

The disadvantage of world of warcraft is money. You must pay every month a bill for playing the game. An other disadvantage is that you need a lot of time. You can play quests and goes up in rangs, but you need much time to get a high rang and to complete all quests. There’re also a lot of people who are addicted at the game, those people doesn’t know the difference between real life and virtual life, and are only gaming and gaming world of warcraft.

Much people are addicted at the game, and are escaping the dearniss of life. It’s a great beautifull game with many possibilities and a game were you’ve got a second life, but it isn’t an alternative or does it? The only reason I could find out that people plays world of warcraft when they feel down is that they think the game is a second life. People can forget their problems when they play the game, because only then they’re in another life. They’re in a life were they hardly can fail, but only can win.

*ik geef hieronder de tekst met de nodige correcties weer*
World of warcraft
Some people feel down, but instead of going to their doctor or psychologist, some people escape the sadness of life by gaming online, but why are people gaming such a game as world of warcraft when they feel down?
*als je zoiets als deerlijkheid bedoelt kun je dat het beste vertalen met sadness, aangezien dearnis een niet bestaand woord is*
Only to escape the sadness of life?

Sure, a lot of people play World of Warcraft to escape the sadness of life.
*a lot of people is meervoud, dus je moet play gebruiken*
It’s a massively multiplayer online rol-playing game ( MMORPG). You can make your own characters into a world with a lot of specialities. It’s a world that you can make with your imagination, you’re a whole other person in this imagination.

My first impression of world of warcraft is that it’s easy to play, it’s not difficult and you don’t need a PC that can run Crysis, that’s a game for which you need a good PC, however you don’t need a good PC to play the game.
*mine is een zelfstandig gebruikt bezittelijk voornaamwoord, maar je moet hier my gebruiken, en verder moet je, omdat you hier de tweede persoon enkelvoud is, don't gebruiken*
The graphics of the game are quite good.
*quiet betekent rust, stilte, of kalmte*
You’ve also got a lot things to choose from. There’re different varieties, and many quests. You can play these quests with your buddies.

The disadvantage of world of warcraft is money. Every month you must pay a bill for playing the game. Another disadvantage is that you need a lot of time.
*another wordt altijd als één woord geschreven*
You can play quests and go up in ranks, but you need much time to get a high rank and to complete all quests. There’re also a lot of people who are addicted to the game, those people don’t know the difference between real life and virtual life, and are only gaming and play world of warcraft.
*doesn't kan alleen bij de derde persoon enkelvoud (he, she, it) worden gebruikt, maar omdat those people meervoud is moet je hier don't gebruiken*

Much people are addicted to the game, and are escaping the sadness of life. It’s a great beautifull game with many possibilities and a game were you’ve got a second life, but it isn’t an alternative or is it?
*does it kan wel worden gebruikt als je isn't door doesn't offer vervangt*
The only reason I could find out that people play world of warcraft when they feel down is that they think the game is a second life. People can forget their problems when they play the game, because only then they’re in another life. They’re in a life were they can hardly fail, but can only win.

World of warcraft
Some people feel down, but instead of going to their doctor or psychologist, some people escape the sadness of life by gaming online, but why are people gaming such a game as world of warcraft when they feel down?
Only to escape the sadness of life?

Sure, a lot of people play World of Warcraft to escape the sadness of life.
It’s a massively multiplayer online role-playing game ( MMORPG). You can make your own characters into a world with a lot of possibilities (ik snap niet echt wat je met specialities bedoelt). It’s a world that you can make with your imagination, you’re a totally different person in this imagination.

My first impression of world of warcraft is that it’s easy to play, it’s not difficult and you don’t need a PC that can run Crysis, which is a game for which you need a good PC, however you don’t need a good PC to play World of Worldcraft (anders is het onduidelijk over welk spel je het hebt.)
The graphics of the game are quite good.
You’ve also got a lot things to choose from. There’s much variety, and there're many quests. You can play these quests with your buddies.

The disadvantage of world of warcraft is money. Every month you must pay a bill for playing the game. Another disadvantage is that you need a lot of time.
You can play quests and go up in ranks, but you need much time to get a high rank and to complete all quests. There’re also a lot of people who are addicted to the game, those people don’t know the difference between real life and virtual life, and are only gaming and play world of warcraft.

Many people are addicted to the game, and are escaping the sadness of life by playing it. It’s a great and beautifull game with many possibilities and a game were you’ve got a second life, but it isn’t an alternative or is it?
The only reason I could find out why people play world of warcraft when they feel down is because they think the game is a second life. People can forget their problems when they play the game, because only then they’re in another life. They’re in a life were they can hardly fail, but can only win. (Je zegt 'they can hardly fail'. Als je daarna 'only win' zegt, spreekt het elkaar tegen.)

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Ik zou als ik jou was de zinnen iets korter maken door ze te verdelen in twee of soms zelfs drie aparte zinnen. Oogt leuker.

Is het niet:"Massive multiplayer online role-playing game"?

There are

Ja.

Waarom kan het niet "there're" zijn?

Het zal vast geen onmogelijke contraction zijn, het ziet er alleen vreselijk lelijk uit.