De laatse woorden die ik aan hem verspil...
 

Liar

You pretended you wanted to be with me,
You say you truly care,
But when I was face to face with you,
It was like I was not even there.

I've tried my best to make you happy
And please you in every way,
But if you don't want to be with me --
There's nothing more I can do or say.

I waste my tears on you every night,
And pray that tomorrow everything will be all right.
But things never do. They always stay the same,
So I need to realize, You will never change.


What Did You Expect?

You came into my life
As quickly as you left.
You grabbed a cutting knife
And sliced right through my breast.

You didn't mean to hurt
But what did you expect?

My heart now cut in two
It feels beyond repair.
Injury done by you
God, life just isn't fair.

You didn't mean to hurt
But what did you expect?

So here we are, just friends,
But I long to be more.
Desire with no end
Throbbing from my core.

You didn't mean to hurt
But what did you expect?


Let's Make A Deal

You forgive me for liking you too much,
And I'll forgive you for not liking me enough.

You forgive me for missing you so,
And I'll forgive you for being so cold.

You forgive me for the loud racing of my heart,
And I'll forgive you for not hearing it.

You forgive me for playing your games,
And I'll forgive you for toying with my emotions.

You forgive me for finding you so attractive,
And I'll forgive you for not noticing.

You forgive me for raising you up so high,
And I'll forgive you for bringing me down so low.

You forgive me for wanting to be with you,
And I'll forgive you for avoiding me.

You forgive me for being so pathetic,
And I'll forgive you for taking advantage of it.

You forgive me for not being able to let go,
And I'll forgive you for never having latched on.

You forgive me for having hopes and dreams,
And I'll forgive you for crushing them.

Forgiveness brings inner peace.
Do we have a deal?

De 1e is zo sterk, zo goed, zo mooi. Hij rijmt ook perfect zonder dwangrijm. Je zou hem eventueel nog een keer kunnen doorspitten en wat woordjes aan elkaar kunnen plakken zodat hij nog net iets lekkerder loopt, dat kost ook niet veel moeite denk ik http://forum.scholieren.com/smile.gif. Die tweede vind ik ook erg koel, vooral de eerste strofe is zo puur en hard http://forum.scholieren.com/smile.gif.

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GEWELDIG!harstikke mooi.moest er bijna van huilen, jij beschrijft hoe ik me voel, vooral bij het laaste gedicht..
dat is iets wat ik laast heb meegeammkt bij mezelf...

angel

Dank je wel!! http://forum.scholieren.com/smile.gif
Dat je het hebt meegemaakt is wat minder http://forum.scholieren.com/frown.gif...