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Gothic 19-01-2003 18:14

You fool...
 
Six months already, time flies when you're having fun,
I'm getting older, things are getting more serious,
We're creating a personality, wanting to find you,
My waters still run deep, I want to stay mysterious.

You're still crazy but really cool and so much fun,
8 'o clock in the morning, you knocking on my door,
With a wite rose and your sweet nice smile,
You stayed 1 hour, I'd wish you could stay longer.

Celebrating, we had to little time, miss you already,
But too bad you you couldn't stay, now you're gone,
So I went up-stairs, reading the note you gave me,
It said: "you fool..." and I said: "I love you",
just like the song,
and I said to myself: I want to be with you...


tja, het is niet geweldig ofzo

moenbase 20-01-2003 13:55

Misschien niet geweldig, maar 't is wel lief :) 'k bedoel: 'k vind het lief.

Gothic 21-01-2003 13:15

Ik had nu een keer geprobeerd zonder rijm te schrijven... Is dat beter, of zou rijm het gedicht misschien beter maken?


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