engels brief hulp nodig

[swolha]

Wie kan mij helpen dit is de situatie waar ik een brief over moet schrijven: Je hebt te maken met een ingewikkelde situatie. Je hebt namelijk een gezin onder je hoede waarvan de twee kinderen regelmatig worden mishandeld door hun vader. Jij wil de kinderen uit huis laten plaatsen, maar de moeder weigert hiermee in te stemmen: niet omdat ze het niet eens is met jouw beslissing, maar omdat ze bang is dat haar man haar zal gaan mishandelen.
Nu heb je in het vaktijdschrift ‘Child life’ gelezen dat de ‘Child Protective Services’ in Engeland hier een bijzondere aanpak voor heeft. Je schrijft Mr. Scott Donaghue of hij jou hier meer informatie over kan geven.



Dit is wat ik geprobeerd heb.

(eigen adres)

Mr Scott Donaghue
36 Midlothain Drive
Berkshire SL4 4AY
Great Britain

18th January, 2005

Dear mr Scott Danagheu

I have read your article about your organisation in the latest Child life.
I'd be interested if you had more information about it because I have a family under my authority where the children regularly are maltreated. I have decides that the children can be better leave this family. But the mother of the children is disagree. She accepts my decides completely but she refused to vote. The reason why she will not vote is that the mother of the two children is afraid that when the cilderen must leave the house that she will be maltreated.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Your sincerely,

(handtekening)

(Naam)

[Belgarath]

Dit is wat ik geprobeerd heb.

(eigen adres)

Mr Scott Donaghue
36 Midlothain Drive
Berkshire SL4 4AY
Great Britain

18th January, 2005

Dear mr Scott Danagheu

I have read your article about your organisation in the latest Child life.
I would like to receive more information about it (wat bedoel je precies met "it"? de organisatie of de aanpak van de organisatie) because I have a family under my authority where (in which? ) the children are regularly maltreated. I have decides (decides is niet een zelfstandig naamwoord, decision wel, ) that it is better for the children to leave this family . The mother of the children disagrees . She accepts my decides (decision?) completely but she refused to vote. The reason why she will not vote (vote is kiezen als in verkiezingen; wat bedoel je precies met deze zin? ) is that the mother of the two children is afraid that when the cilderen must leave the house she will be maltreated.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Your's sincerely,

(handtekening)

(Naam)

[Klaas B.]

Uhm, dit is bijna net zo slecht als, of zelfs slechter dan de eerste poging van de topicstarter.

[Sanctus]

Klaas B. schreef op 20-01-2006 @ 13:00 :
Uhm, dit is bijna net zo slecht als, of zelfs slechter dan de eerste poging van de topicstarter.

[swolha]

Een nieuwe versie...

(Mijn adres)

Mr Scott Donaghue
36 Midlothain Drive
Berkshire SL4 4AY
Great Britain

18th January, 2005

Dear mr Scott Danagheu,

I am mrs Hanna van Swol and I am working for a Dutch organisation for childcare. I have read your article with a lot of interesting about your organisation in the latest Child life.
I'd be interested if you had more information about your specially treatment because I have a family under my authority where the children regularly are mistreated by their father. I visit this family every week and every time I see them, the children are black an bleu.

I have decided that the children would be better off to leave this family. I will comment this because it is a serious decision. I give you’re an example of the seriousness mistreated children. I was there last week and the youngest daughter had nine stitches in her head. Causes by her Father when he, her against the wall to threw.
But the mother of the children disagrees. She accepts my decision completely but she refuses to vote. The reason why she will not vote is that the mother of the two children is afraid that when the children must leave the house that she will be also mistreated by her husband. And I can’t find a sufficient treatment in the Dutch literature.

I am looking forward to hear from you. I am curious if your treatment will work on this family.

Your sincerely,



Hanna van Swol

[Nick-Name]

Ff snel wat aanpassingen aan de eerste alinea.. Ik zou trouwens de volgorde van je verhaal wat omgooien om het beter te laten lopen.. maar dat ga ik niet voor je uitzoeken

I am mrs Hanna van Swol and I am working for a Dutch organisation for childcare. (My name is Hanna van Swol and I work for a Dutch childcare organisation.) I have read your article with a lot of interesting about your organisation in the latest Child life. (When I was reading the latest edition of Child Life, your article “naam artikel” caught my attention.)
I'd be interested if you had more information about your specially treatment because I have a family under my authority where the children regularly are mistreated by their father. (I was wondering if you have more information about your special treatment for ‘welk treatment ie meer advise voor heft gegeven’. I ask you this because I’m responsible (beetje raar maar als je zegt datje de authority over dat gezin hebt zal het wel..) for a family where the children are mistreated by their father.)
I visit this family every week and every time I see them, the children are black an bleu. (I visit this family every week and it shocks me to see that the children have been badly beaten by their father.)

[mathfreak]

swolha schreef op 20-01-2006 @ 12:08 :
Wie kan mij helpen dit is de situatie waar ik een brief over moet schrijven: Je hebt te maken met een ingewikkelde situatie. Je hebt namelijk een gezin onder je hoede waarvan de twee kinderen regelmatig worden mishandeld door hun vader. Jij wil de kinderen uit huis laten plaatsen, maar de moeder weigert hiermee in te stemmen: niet omdat ze het niet eens is met jouw beslissing, maar omdat ze bang is dat haar man haar zal gaan mishandelen.
Nu heb je in het vaktijdschrift ‘Child life’ gelezen dat de ‘Child Protective Services’ in Engeland hier een bijzondere aanpak voor heeft. Je schrijft Mr. Scott Donaghue of hij jou hier meer informatie over kan geven.

*ik geef hieronder de brief met de nodige correcties weer*
(Mijn adres)

Mr Scott Donaghue
36 Midlothain Drive
Berkshire SL4 4AY
Great Britain

18th January, 2005

Dear Mr Donaghue,

I am Mrs Hanna van Swol and I am working for a Dutch organisation for childcare. I read your article about your organisation in the latest Child life with a lot of interest.
I would like to know if you have more information about your special treatment because I have a family with two children under my authority in which the children are regularly mistreated by their father. I visit this family every week and every time when I see them, the children are black and blue.

I decided that the children had better leave this family. I will comment on this because it is a serious decision. I give you an example of the serious mistreatment of the children. I was there last week and the youngest daughter had nine stitches in her head. This was caused by her father when he threw her against the wall.
But the mother of the children disagrees with my decision. She completely accepts my decision but she refuses to agree with it. The reason why she will not agree with it, is that she is afraid that when the children must leave the house she will also be mistreated by her husband. And I cannot find a proper treatment in the Dutch literature.

I look forward to hearing from you. I am curious if your treatment will work on this family.

Yours sincerely,



Hanna van Swol

Opmerking: in de aanhef vermeld je alleen de achternaam van degene aan wie je schrijft. Verder mag je in een formele brief nooit samentrekkingen als can't gebruiken. In een informele brief is dat geen bezwaar.

[Dinalfos]

mathfreak schreef op 21-01-2006 @ 19:20 :
*And I cannot find the sufficient("proper" is in deze context misschien een betere woordkeuze, maar okay) treatment in the Dutch literature.

I look forward to hearing from you. I am curious if your treatment will work on for this family.

Yours sincerely,



.

[swolha]

Bedankt allemaal!

[mathfreak]

Dinalfos schreef op 21-01-2006 @ 22:00 :
"proper" is in deze context misschien een betere woordkeuze

Ik heb het inmiddels aangepast. Proper lijkt mij bij nader inzien ook een betere woordkeuze.

[Nick-Name]

mathfreak schreef op 21-01-2006 @ 19:20 :
*ik geef hieronder de brief met de nodige correcties weer*
(Mijn adres)

Mr Scott Donaghue
36 Midlothain Drive
Berkshire SL4 4AY
Great Britain

18th January, 2005

Dear Mr Donaghue,

I am Mrs Hanna van Swol and I am working for a Dutch organisation for childcare. I read your article about your organisation in the latest Child life with a lot of interest.
I would like to know if you have more information about your special treatment because I have a family with two children under my authority in which the children are regularly mistreated by their father. I visit this family every week and every time when I see them, the children are black and blue.

I decided that the children had better leave this family. I will comment on this because it is a serious decision. I give you an example of the serious mistreatment of the children. I was there last week and the youngest daughter had nine stitches in her head. This was caused by her father when he threw her against the wall.
But the mother of the children disagrees with my decision. She completely accepts my decision but she refuses to agree with it. The reason why she will not agree with it, is that she is afraid that when the children must leave the house she will also be mistreated by her husband. And I cannot find a proper treatment in the Dutch literature.

I look forward to hearing from you. I am curious if your treatment will work on this family.

Yours sincerely,



Hanna van Swol

Opmerking: in de aanhef vermeld je alleen de achternaam van degene aan wie je schrijft. Verder mag je in een formele brief nooit samentrekkingen als can't gebruiken. In een informele brief is dat geen bezwaar.

Niet om vervelend te zijn maar dit is nauwlijks een verbetering op de brief van de TS Misschien toch beter in Wiskunde

[Nick-Name]

I have decided that the children would be better off to leave this family. (I think that the children are better off if they are taken from their father) I will comment this because it is a serious decision. (gewoon weglaten) I give you’re an example of the seriousness mistreated children. (an example off the serieus beatings these children have to suffer, I will give you an example: ) I was there last week and the youngest daughter had nine stitches in her head. Causes by her Father when he, her against the wall to threw. (When I visited the family last week, I was shocked to see the youngest daughter having nine stitches in her head caused by her father throwing her at the wall) wat een grap trouwens, een vader die een kind mishandelt gaat niet zo snel ermee naar de dokter denk ik.. en welke dokter laat het kind dan weer teruggaan met dezelfde vader )
But the mother of the children disagrees. She accepts my decision completely but she refuses to vote. The reason why she will not vote is that the mother of the two children is afraid that when the children must leave the house that she will be also mistreated by her husband. And I can’t find a sufficient treatment in the Dutch literature. (the mother of the children also feels that something has to be done. She is, however, afraid that when the children are taken from their dad, he will treat her the way she is treating her children now lol, dit is dan de eerste moeder die liever de kinderen in elkaar zit worden geslagen dan derzelf..

I am looking forward to hear from you. I am curious if your treatment will work on this family. (I wonder if you could tell me what to do because something has to be done. Maybe your advise will help save the children, or even better, the family)

YourS sincerely,



Hanna van Swol