Engels

Beste mensen,
Ik moet voor engels een report schrijven over londen.
Ik ben daar zelf ook geweest.
Ik ben slecht in Engels,
maar nu is mijn vraag of jullie mijn tekst zou
willen lezen en zeggen wat je er van vindt.
En als je iets wilt verbeteren....graag.
Alvast Bedankt.

I was from 4 to 6 November in London . We traveled there by bus and boat. It was a long journey, but very nice and I especially enjoyed the beautiful landscape. About 10 hours we arrived at our hostel and we left our bags behind. We went on our first trip for the nature of the science museum. The museum was very big and beautiful building. Many working in the building. There were small monkeys in the pillars. The museum had several departments such as dinosaurs, rocks, monkeys etc.. The rest of the day we had free time. I went to see Harrods in the night. I was also impressed by the traffic and the subway in London. The next morning my breakfast was unwise it. Then we went to the Globe Theatre. It was very nice, sunroof, beautiful paintings inside, etc..Afterwards we spend together some food in a Turkish restaurant on the appetizer that tasted like pine needles were all very nice. The rest of day we had free time again. The free time I used looking by highlights. So I went to London Bridge, Tower Bridge, Buckingham Palace, Big Ben and St. Paul `s Cathedral was. The buildings were all impressive. Finally, I am on that day to Oxford Street, in that I went shopping and shops nice views. The next day we put the trip back home. It was all in all a successful trip to never forget.

[serac]

[QUOTE=Bianca-88;31055427]Beste mensen,
Ik moet voor engels een rapport schrijven over londen.
Ik ben daar zelf ook geweest.
Ik ben slecht in Engels,
maar nu is mijn vraag of jullie mijn tekst zou
willen lezen en zeggen wat je er van vindt.
En als je iets wilt verbeteren....graag.
Alvast Bedankt.

I stayed in London 4 to 6 November. We went there by bus and boat. It was a long journey, including the boat ride, but it was very nice. In England, I enjoyed the landscape. After about 10 hours travel time we finally arrived at our hostel, where we left our bags behind. Then we went on our first trip to the Nature Science Museum. The museum is in a very big and beautiful building. Lots of people there, working in the building. There are small monkeysm cut in the pillars. The museum has several departments such as dinosaurs, rocks, monkeys etc. The remainder of the day we were off on our own. As for me, I went to see Harrods that evening.
I was greatly impressed by the traffic and the subway of London. The next morning, at breakfast WAT IS DIT ?was unwise it. We went out to see the Globe Theatre. It is a very interesting place, open air with a sunroof, beautiful paintings inside, and much more. Following this visit, we went together to get some food in a Turkish restaurant, and where we got an appetizer that tasted like pine needles. We were off on our own for the rest of the day. I went to see some of the landmarks of London, the London Bridge, Tower Bridge, Buckingham Palace, Big Ben and St. Paul `s Cathedral. The buildings are quite impressive. I ended up that day on Oxford Street, famous for shopping and viewing shops.
Next day was the trip back home. All in all, It was a success, a trip never to forget.

[Tazer]

Serac, jij laat veel fouten na....
Dit is mijn versie van je verhaal, volgens mij heb ik alle fouten er uit gehaald. Tevens heb ik er nog wat tijden veranderd waar je Engels docent wel gecharmeerd over zal zijn.

I stayed in London from the 4th till the 6th November. We went there by bus and by boat. Altogether
, it was a long journey, but it was a very nice one. In England, I enjoyed the landscape. After about 10 hours of travelling we finally arrived at our hostel, where we left our bags behind. Then we went on our first trip to the Nature Science Museum. The museum is in a very big and beautiful building. Lots of people were working in the building. There are small monkeys carved in the pillars. The museum has several departments such as dinosaurs, rocks, monkeys etc. The remainder of the day was that we were off on our own. But, I went to see Harrods that evening.
I was greatly impressed by the traffic and the subway of London. The next morning, we went out to see the Globe Theatre. It is a very interesting place, the building had a ''sunroof'', beautiful paintings inside, and much more. Later on, we went together to get some food in a Turkish restaurant, where we got an appetizer that tasted like pine needles. The rest of the day we were free to explorer the city on ourselves. I went to see some of the landmarks of London, the London Bridge, Tower Bridge, Buckingham Palace, Big Ben and St. Paul `s Cathedral. The buildings were quite impressive. I ended up that day on Oxford Street, which is famous because of its shops. The next day we had to leave London, after another long journey we were finally back in Holland. Altogether it was a great success, a trip I would never forget in my life!

[June bug]

Jouw versie van het rapport is anders niet zo heel veel beter hoor Tazer, dus die hooghartige toon slaat helemaal nergens op.

Alvast bedankt allen ik hou momenteel deze versie aan:

I stayed in London from the 4th till the 6th November. We went there by bus and by boat. Altogether
, it was a long journey, but it was a very nice one. In England, I enjoyed the landscape. After about 10 hours of travelling we finally arrived at our hostel, where we left our bags behind. Then we went on our first trip to the Nature Science Museum. The museum is in a very big and beautiful building. Lots of people were working in the building. There are small monkeys carved in the pillars. The museum has several departments such as dinosaurs, rocks, monkeys etc. The remainder of the day was that we were off on our own. But, I went to see Harrods that evening.
I was greatly impressed by the traffic and the subway of London. The next morning, we went out to see the Globe Theatre. It is a very interesting place, the building had a ''sunroof'', beautiful paintings inside, and much more. Later on, we went together to get some food in a Turkish restaurant, where we got an appetizer that tasted like pine needles. The rest of the day we were free to explorer the city on ourselves. I went to see some of the landmarks of London, the London Bridge, Tower Bridge, Buckingham Palace, Big Ben and St. Paul `s Cathedral. The buildings were quite impressive. I ended up that day on Oxford Street, which is famous because of its shops. The next day we had to leave London, after another long journey we were finally back in Holland. Altogether it was a great success, a trip I would never forget in my life!

[Geel]

I stayed in London from 4 till 6 November. We went there by bus and by boat. Altogether, it was a long, but nice journey. In England, I enjoyed the landscape. After about 10 hours of traveling we finally arrived at our hostel. We left our bags behind at the hostel and went out for our first trip, a visit to the Nature Science museum. The museum was in a very big and beautiful building where lots of people were working. There were small monkeys carved in the pillars. The museum had several departments such as the dinosaurs-department, rocks-department, monkeys-department, etc. After the visit we were free to do as we liked. I went to see Harrods that evening. I was greatly impressed by the traffic and the subway of London.
The next morning, we went out to see the Globe Theatre. It was a very interesting place. The building had a ''sunroof'', beautiful paintings inside and much more. Later on, we went together to get some food in a Turkish restaurant, where we got an appetizer which tasted like pine needles. The rest of the day we were free to explore the city on ourselves. I went to see some of the landmarks of London: the London Bridge, the Tower Bridge, Buckingham Palace, Big Ben and St. Paul's Cathedral. The buildings were quite impressive. I ended up (that day) on Oxford Street, which is famous because of its shops. The next day we had to leave London. After another long journey we were finally back in the Netherlands. Altogether it was a great success, a trip I will never forget in my life!



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Fouten die ik over het hoofd heb gezien voorbehouden.
De tekst tussen de haakjes kun je net zo goed weglaten.

[Tazer]

Ook belangrijk, tijdsbepaling komt altijd voorin of achterin de zin.
Dus het is of: I ended up on Oxford street that day
of: That day, I ended up on Oxford street.

[serac]

June bug schreef:

Jouw versie van het rapport is anders niet zo heel veel beter hoor Tazer, dus die hooghartige toon slaat helemaal nergens op.

Geeft niks, toch ? Ik heb 6 jaar op engelstalige scholen gezeten, de meeste amerikaans georienteerd.
Daarvoor 3 jaar op een spaanse (vanaf kindergarten) en 4 jaar op een franse.

[Kate_1221]

From the fourth till the sixth of November, of from four till six November.

Als de bus waar je op zat een bus was die je school had gehuurd en niet een reguliere bus, dan noem je het een 'coach' en niet een 'bus'.

'In England, I enjoyed the landscape' is niet een zin die ik zou gebruiken. Maak er dan 'I enjoyed the English landscape' van. Maar 'I especially enjoyed the beautiful landscape' klinkt prima, hoor.

Inderdaad even letten op je tenses: 'the museum was in a very big and beautiful building', 'the museum had several departments ...' etc.

Verder is het 'carved into the pillars'.

'The remainder of that day we went off on our own. I also went to see Harrods that evening/that evening, I went to see Harrods.' 'But' is niet logisch in dit verband, het feit dat je naar Harrods bent geweest is geen contradictie van het feit dat je de rest van die dag alleen hebt doorgebracht.

'The next morning, we went to see the Globe Theatre.' 'Out' is overbodig.

En weer op je tijden letten: 'It was a very interesting place'.

'Later on, we went to get some food in a Turkish restaurant together. In the restaurant we got an appetizer that tasted like pine needles.'

'Explore', niet 'explorer', maar ik neem aan dat dat een tikfout is.

'I went to see some of the landmarks of London: the London Bridge ...' of 'I went to see some of the landmarks of London, namely the London Bridge, Tower Bridge ...'

En zoals gezegd: 'That day, I ended up on Oxford street, which is famous for its shops.'

'The next day we had to leave London, and after another long journey ...' of 'The next day we had to leave London. After another long journey ...'

'A trip I will never forget.'