something's wrong

Gary X · **09-08-2003, 14:39**

the sun is shining, but there's no sunshine
the over-populated city looks abandoned

the sky is blue, but it's dark outside
the sour smell of death is all around

it's the night the dead will awake
it's the night the voices are silent

nobody understands
and nobody will...

dark_poetry · **09-08-2003, 18:44**

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Gary Craptalk schreef op 09-08-2003 @ 14:39:
the sun is shining, but there's no sunshine
the over-populated city looks abandoned

the sky is blue, but it's dark outside
the sour smell of death is all around

it's the night the dead will awake
it's the night the voices are silent

nobody understands
and nobody will...

i like it

Escapism · **09-08-2003, 20:38**

gaap

Halogeen · **10-08-2003, 22:05**

hihi... in dat liedje van K's Choice was het nog:

When your pubic hair's on fire...
Something's wrong!

Maar ik vind het gedicht qua inhoud niet echt veelzeggend, en qua taalgebruik een beetje cliché en de vorm is ook niet super. Sorry, maar ik denk dat dit beter kan.

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09-08-2003, 14:39
Gary X	the sun is shining, but there's no sunshine the over-populated city looks abandoned the sky is blue, but it's dark outside the sour smell of death is all around it's the night the dead will awake it's the night the voices are silent nobody understands and nobody will... __________________ "I can get more women than a passenger train can hold." - Jimmie Rodgers

09-08-2003, 20:38
Escapism	gaap __________________ He thought the diaries of Anne Frank were "an Adrian Mole sort of thing"

10-08-2003, 22:05
Halogeen	hihi... in dat liedje van K's Choice was het nog: When your pubic hair's on fire... Something's wrong! Maar ik vind het gedicht qua inhoud niet echt veelzeggend, en qua taalgebruik een beetje cliché en de vorm is ook niet super. Sorry, maar ik denk dat dit beter kan. __________________ I know a ghost can walk through a wall, yet, I'm just a man, still learning how to fall

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