Opinies welkom!!!

[Somari]

Ik ben eventjes weggeweest, en ik weet niet of ik het nog kan. Dus als iemand (of iedereen) wat opbouwende kritiek ergens heeft liggen.....


Be my, be my only friend
Be my, my only helping hand
I've compared you to a flower, but now you're drugs instead of my godess
When I'm with you I feel more
but when you're gone I feel like less than before

Silent screems, sweet dreams
Brake it, don't fake it
There are things you make me do
Brake it, don't fake it
I'll be a slave for you

Be my, my only enemy
Be my bloodsucker taking all you've got from me
I love you and I hate you, when you're gone I'm thinking I#m through, at last I'm free
But then you cry and I am freezed

Sleepless nights, petty lies
Brake it, don't fake it
I can't take it anymore
Barke it, don't fake it
I'll be what you're looking for

You're smile makes me your slave
You're eyes make my heart ache
I keep thinking there's another way
But you drain using me as you're own
You promised me I'd fly, but I was thrown

Make it my mind, make it my voice
Make it my hand, that makes it my choice
Make it my lfe, make it my all for me
Make it as I want it to be

I'm sorry for what I did last night
I'm sure I can make it up alright

[tacidvs]

Somari schreef:
But then you cry and I am freezed

frozen? Vind haar wel in orde, voorzover ik daar over ga. Misschien dat je voor de vorm die paar lange regels in tweeën kan hakken?