Sensitive / Rape (10de)

[A loved one]

She lies on her bed
Her head's buried in her pillow
Her body's shaking
Everytime she breathes

And a man stands in the doorway
Like a boy who stole his mom's chocolate
And his angry fists
And his trembling eyes

And yes, he always told her
That she was too sensitive
But she couldn't handle the pressure
Whispered a word towards her helping hand

But no - There was no help
And he knew she had shared a secret
With a soul that couldn't pretend
And he broke her everything

But now he knows he hurt her
He walkes towards the bed
Trying to calm her down
But she turnes away from him

His anger makes the world turn red
And she tries to get away from him
But he's always been too fast for her
He screams and hits and pushed and broke
Her everything

And yes, he always told her
That she was too sensitive
But at least her world does not consist
Out of rage and fury

And his sweetness and his kindness
His soft words and his soft hands
Seemed to have vanished
Or swallowed by his greyish eyes

And she tried to get away
But the thought of his fists
Comes back in her dreams
And she wakes up in reality

Sometimes he embraces her
Or speaks to her in his own smooth way
But her trust is gone
And she won't survive this

And yes, he always told her
That she was way too sensitive
But at least she never meant to hurt him
At least she never meant to make him cry

(...)

And one day
She'll wake up
And a thought
Comes to her mind

"O my god
What am I doing here?"

She'll get her bag
Opens the door
And flies away

Like a little girl
She's lost her innocence
In the battle
"But it will return",
And she smiles
As her wings
Keep her up in the sky

Love

[iamre18]

tis niet fijn meis...lukt het je door het dichten het een beetje van je af te zetten?

het "grappige" aan dit gedicht is dat een aantal woorden ook in mijn gedicht voorkomen
"a little angelvoice whispered to me" :

(whispered, sky en nog een paar zinnen die er een beetje op lijken)

Heeeej xxxxxxxiamre

[Dit bericht is aangepast door iamre18 (26-11-2001).]

[A loved one]

Bedankt voor je reactie... wat kan ik nog meer zeggen?

Love

[A loved one]

Up

Love

[Gothic]

sad

[Juultje Molecuultje]

Gothic schreef:
sad

maar hoopvol einde...

heel mooi

[misspretty]

het ergst wat je mee kunt maken
heb jij heel "mooi" verwoord .
ik vindt het heel sterk van je dat je er zo"n gedicht er over kunt maken .
ik heb het niet gekunt, wel een gedicht er over gemaakt ,maar zo verwoord dat je het echt moet snappen waar ik het over heb, maar ik wijk veel te veel van het gedicht af.

ik vindt hem prachtig ,echt waar heb er geen kritiek voor ,want hij is gewoon GOED
veel sterkte
veel liefs,
sylvana

[A loved one]

Bedankt, iedereen

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