respect now you're gone..

[sayang-steelo]

can't say
won't explain
if you wanna know it
you gotta feel the pain
you loved me
and true
I felt the same about you
but you left
and I try
to make it
but I cry
my life without you is hard and insecure
but knowing that you're out there
makes me love you even more
even though you died
and left me out here
I know you are watching
you will never dissapear
I knew it was your end
but I couldn't handle it
you were my friend
the pain, i'm feeling it
I just wanted to say
how much I respect you
I wish I got the chance
to tell you
but it wasn't ment to be
you now that to
well I hope you get my message
wherever you may be
maybe one day we meet again, I hope so and we'll see..

this lil' poem is made for my sweet relative that has past away last year. I have so much respect for him, you will never understand, I wish I got the chance to say
how I love him, my friend
though he's not alive anymore
hes in my heart
he is since the day I was born
right from the start
now he's gone I miss him even more
now I know the meaning of this shit
and I just wished I got the chance to share it
love you,

[de doornvogel]

het aantal lettergrepen per zin is perfect zodat het heel goed loopt. Ik vind de woordkeus op zich goed, maar er zitten toch wel een aantal zinnen in die niet zo mooi klinken. Maar verder isie owkay

[sayang-steelo]

thnx.. ik probeer altijd wee verbeteringen aan te brengenmaar soms dan wil ik gewoon dat ee foout een fout blijft begrijp je? om te laten zien dat ik zeeeeker niet perfect ben..