No Blue

I stand her alone
alone by the sea
watching how you are
fading away from me.
I'm willing to scream
I'm willing to run
But I just can't stop thinking
'bout how this all begun

You wanted to change me
paint me in blue
but that's not my colour
and I think you oughtta know
that it will never be mine too.

I listen to the wind
it's quiet today.
It's nothing compared to
what is inside of me.
Inside it is rainging
Inside it is grey
And all because I tried to make
the best of you and me.

You wanted to change me
paint me in blue
but that's not my colour
and I think you oughtta know
that it will never be mine too.

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haha, ok SHOOT:
(verzinseltje voor liedje uiteraard, mag dat ook?)

[Gothic]

Kijk hem eens na op spelfouten is mijn 1e advies...

[Medea]

Gothic schreef op 01-12-2003 @ 18:35:
Kijk hem eens na op spelfouten is mijn 1e advies...

Niet tegenstaande ik rainging (raining) ook wel raar vind moet ik bekennen dat ik hem van inhoud, tekstkeuze en ritme best wel leuk vind. Hier en daar wel wat cliché, maar het is zoals Gothic waarschijnlijk bedoelt , de spelfouten (I stand her alone?) en een paar grammaticale onnauwkeurigheden (I'm willing) staan het waarderen van jouw liedjestekst/ gedicht wat in de weg.

I stand here alone
alone by the sea
watching how you are
fading away from me.
I'm willing to scream
I'm willing to run
But I just can't stop thinking
'bout how this all begun

You wanted to change me
paint me in blue
but that's not my colour
and I think you oughtta know
that it will never be mine too.

I listen to the wind
it's quiet today.
It's nothing compared to
what is inside of me.
Inside it is raining
Inside it is grey
And all because I tried to make
the best of you and me.

You wanted to change me
paint me in blue
but that's not my colour
and I think you oughtta know
that it will never be mine too.


verder... I'm willing??? wat is het dan.. (sorry)

[clantestino]

ja vind 't ook echt zon tekst voor een popliedje ofzo! Wel leuk gedaan .