songtekst achtig idee..

[sayang-steelo]

I saw you yesterday
looking at me that way
makes me want to write a rhyme
and it reminds me of that time
we made love in you're bed
no music
no instead
the sun came shining through the curtain
that was the moment I knew for certain
that you were the one for me
lookin' at me religiously
like I ruled your heart and soul
but my love just had one goal
to make you love me
and it worked
you're so lovely
that it hurts..
you and me
not ment to be
but evry damn time I see
you're eyes staring at me
in that way..
like you did back then and like yesterday..

[Gothic]

sayang-steelo schreef:
I saw you yesterday
looking at me that way
makes me want to write a rhyme
and it reminds me of that time
we made love in your bed
no music
no instead?
the sun came shining through the curtain ev?
that was the moment I knew for certain
that you were the one for me
lookin' at me religiously
like I ruled your heart and soul
but my love just had one goal
to make you love me
and it worked
you're so lovely
that it hurts..
you and me
not meant to be
but every damn time I see
your eyes staring at me
in that way..
like you did back then and like yesterday..

het is niet mijn smaak...

[sayang-steelo]

dus verbeter je het.. ja inderdaad m'n engels gaat echt zwaar achteruit maar dat komt wel weer goed, en dit heb ik effies snel geschreven.. ik lees ook wel effies iets van jou.. ffies kijken.. thnx anyway

[Gothic]

sayang-steelo schreef:
dus verbeter je het.. ja inderdaad m'n engels gaat echt zwaar achteruit maar dat komt wel weer goed, en dit heb ik effies snel geschreven.. ik lees ook wel effies iets van jou.. ffies kijken.. thnx anyway

ik zag wat foutjes, en dat staat niet zo mooi, dus ik denk, ik help je iig daarmee, want over je gedicht wist ik niets te zeggen...

[Ming Doosjuh]

Geforceerde rijm en niet echt dat je zegt geweldig mooie Engelse woorden gebruikt (nogal standaard dus).

[sayang-steelo]

ja da's waar! ik ben niet altijd zo hoor, maar vaak komen er nogal ''standaard'' gedichtjes uit..