Engels brief

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Hallo ik heb de volgende brief gemaakt? Zijn er nog fouten, of andere suggesties?



Katya Simpson
.... 75
.......... Londen
United Kingdom

President Lukashenko Henthol
..... 57
........... Birmingham
United Kingdom


11th December 2006,

Subject: the interrogated of Belarusian models.



Dear mr. Henthol,

Last week I read a article about Belarusian models who would go abroad.
You said that from now on only Belarusians would be allowed to star in advertisements. But most important, and therefore I write this letter, you said that beautiful Belarusian women cannot go abroad anymore. And I think this is ridiculous.

A couple of weeks ago I was on a trip to the United States, for the ‘Supermodel of the World’ contest. And when I came back on the airfield there were lots of people who interrogated me. And this is absolutely going to far! They tried to make me confess that I had been sexually exploited while abroad! You mr. Henthol, and the whole government are making a lot of fuss over nothing.

I, and the most Belarusian models, have not a lot of money. So we want to go abroad and earn some money what we can divide to(onder?) our family. When we stay here in Belarus, some models want to line up to go work as escorts somewhere. And this we have to stop right here.
And I need you help for this. We must allowed that Belarusian models can go abroad to earn money. You have to convince the government and I will convince the whole model world.

Together we can make an end to the sexual exploitation of models!


An early reply would be appreciated.


Yours sincerely,
Katya Simpson

Katya Simpson
.... 75
.......... Londen
United Kingdom

President Lukashenko Henthol
..... 57
........... Birmingham
United Kingdom


December 11th 2006,

Subject: the interrogated of Belarusian models.
Ik weet niet wat je precies wilt zeggen, maar ik denk dat het the interrogation of Belarusian models moet zijn. Dit klopt in ieder geval niet.



Dear mr. Henthol,

Last week I read an article about Belarusian models who would go abroad.
You said that from now on only Belarusians would be allowed to star in advertisements. But most important, and therefore I write this letter, you said that beautiful Belarusian women cannot go abroad anymore. And I think this is ridiculous.

A couple of weeks ago I was on a trip to the United States, for the ‘Supermodel of the World’ contest. And when I came back on the airfield there were lots of people who interrogated me. And this is absolutely going to far! They tried to make me confess that I had been sexually exploited while abroad! You mr. Henthol, and the whole government are making a lot of fuss over nothing.
A lot of fuss over nothing klinkt een beetje raar, denk niet dat dat klopt.

I, and the most Belarusian models, don't have a lot of money. So we want to go abroad and earn some money which we can divide up with (weet ik niet zeker) our family. When we stay here in Belarus, some models want to line up to go work as escorts somewhere. And this we have to stop right here. right now?
And I need you help for this. We must allow that Belarusian models can go abroad to earn money. You have to convince the government and I will convince the whole model world.

Together we can make an end to the sexual exploitation of models!


An early reply would be appreciated.


Yours sincerely,
Katya Simpson


Daarnaast heb je wel erg vaak het woordje and gebruikt, ook aan het begin van zinnen. Je kunt er beter een heleboel weghalen.
Er zitten vast nog meer fouten in, maar die moet iemand anders er maar uithalen

And I need you're help for this.

... ther were lots of people interrogating me. denk ik?


verder weet ik het allemaal niet zeker

Mr Soija schreef op 09-12-2006 @ 10:51 :
And I need you're help for this.

your help
you're = you are

Sarah schreef op 09-12-2006 @ 12:11 :

your help
you're = you are

omg, hoe heb ik dat nou kunnen schrijven *in muurtje wegschaamt*

[mathfreak]

*ik geef hieronder de tekst met de nodige correcties weer*

Katya Simpson
.... 75
.......... Londen
United Kingdom

President Lukashenko Henthol
..... 57
........... Birmingham
United Kingdom


11th December 2006,

Subject: the interrogation of Belarusian models.



Dear mr. Henthol,

Last week I read an article about Belarusian models who would go abroad.
You said that from now on only Belarusians would be allowed to star in advertisements. But most important, and therefore I write this letter, you said that beautiful Belarusian women cannot go abroad anymore. And I think this is ridiculous.

A couple of weeks ago I was on a trip to the United States, for the ‘Supermodel of the World’ contest. And when I came back on the airport there were lots of people who interrogated me. And this is absolutely going too far! They tried to make me confess that I had been sexually exploited while abroad! You, mr. Henthol, and the whole government are making a lot of fuss about nothing.

I, and most Belarusian models, have not got/do not have a lot of money. So we want to go abroad and earn some money that we can divide among our family. When we stay here in Belarus, some models want to line up to go work as escorts somewhere. And this we have to stop right here.
I need your help for this. It must be allowed that Belarusian models can go abroad to earn money. You have to convince the government and I will convince the whole model world.

Together we can make an end to the sexual exploitation of models!


An early reply would be appreciated.


Yours sincerely,
Katya Simpson

[Dinalfos]

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Katya Simpson
.... 75
.......... Londen
United Kingdom

President Lukashenko Henthol
..... 57
........... Birmingham
United Kingdom


11th December 2006,

Subject: the interrogated interrogation of Belarusian models.



Dear mr. Henthol,

Last week I read a article about Belarusian models who would go abroad.
You said that, from now on, only Belarusians would be allowed to star in advertisements. But most importantly (alhoewel important eigenlijk misplaatst is in deze context. Maar het kan wel ), and the main reason why I'm writing this letter, you said that beautiful Belarusian women cannot go abroad anymore are no longer allowed to go abroad anymore. And I think this is ridiculous.

A couple of weeks ago, I was on a trip to the United States, for the ‘Supermodel of the World’ contest. And when I came arrived back on the airport there were lots of people who wanted (ik zou in het midden laten of je ook daadwerkelijk ondervraagd bent, aangezien dat je zaak negatief kan beinvloeden. Als je aangeeft ondervraagd te zijn, zullen ze je sneller neerzetten als een labiel iemand die wat emotioneel reageert ) to interrogate me. (Je kunt eventueel ook 'people' vervangen door een functie, bijvoorbeeld agent of beambte, aangezien 'people' in het algemeen niet zoveel aanleiding hebben om iemand te 'interrogaten' ) And this is absolutely going to far! They tried to make me confess that I had been sexually exploited while abroad! You mr. Henthol, and the whole government are making a lot of fuss over nothing. (nogmaals, ik zou deze zin weglaten. Maar goed, dat heeft allemaal niets met taal te maken )

I, and the most Belarusian models most other Belarusian models as well , have not got a lot of money (ik zou hier persoonlijk een hele andere zinsopbouw voor geven. Denk: I, and this goes for most Belarusian models, don't have a lot of money ). So we want to go abroad and earn some money what that we can divide among our family families. (dit was opnieuw een ongebruikelijke formulering, maar wel mogelijk ) When we stay here in Belarus During our stay here in Belarus, some models are willing to take/accept line up jobs as escorts somewhere. (And) this needs to stop, but I'm going to need your help. It should be allowed that Belarusian models can go abroad to earn their paychecks. You'll (je had al gevraagd om zijn hulp, dus 'you'll' dient hier als taakomschrijving) have to try to convince the government on this subject, and I will try to convince the whole model world.

Together we can make put an end to the sexual exploitation of models!


An early reply would be appreciated.


Yours sincerely,
Katya Simpson