waking up

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ik weet niet of ik em als af beschouw, maar dit is het igg voor vanavond.... graag commentaar (negatief zowel als positief) ..


A constant rustle dreadfully drags me out..
vague appearances become clear as I try opening my eyes
sunlight bursts in my head creating a decreasing pain
slowly sitting up as my world keeps lying down
rubbing the last pieces of those illusions form the corner of my eye..
and suddenly it hits me...

...sitting, alone, on a cold rock filled with disappointments,
autumn winds carry whispers through the trees,
gathering them in my head...

Slowly guiding my fingers through my hair..
Where will my thoughts take me
My warmth leaves me, a cold blow takes me back…

…a black crow lands next to me,
bringing a slow breeze…a whisper..
‘built a forest.. shred a tear’
snow flakes cover my tracks… will I find my way back..

standing up as pain fills my feet
as I lean over my hair slips from my ears
falls before my eyes, building a weak wall…
a shadow darkens my eyes…

…snow cracks under my bare feet..
filling the holes between my toes and my soul
watching over the misty lake..
the water is yet cold but takes away so much pain…

tear filled eyes starring back in the mirror
leaning against the wall, closing my eyes
my world keeps starring…

silence…

[mandydw]

Wauw!!!Heb je dit zelf geschreven????dan ben je echt wel getalenteerd!!!ik vind het echt heeeeeeel mooi.Heb je er nog meer????

[funest]

thx.... en jah heb ik zelf geschreven jah
kheb er nog wel een paar, misschien dak die er een keer opgooi