Engels presentatie hulp.

[jellenl]

Hallo iedereen,

Ik heb morgen een engels presentatie met nog iemand uit mijn klas en ik wil hier graag een redelijk cijfer voor halen. Alleen ik denk dat er wel wat grammatica foutjes etc in zitten. Zou iemand hier misschien even snel naar willen kijken aub?

Hier is de tekst (Het gaat over de tornado in amerika van afgelopen zondag):
(ps let niet te veel op het verloop van de tekst want er hoort een powerpoint bij)

Sunday night, 22th may, A tornado passed the city Joblin in the state of Missouri in America.
So far, 116 people has lost their life to the tornado and the death count is still rising since there may be more people stuck underneath collapsed houses.
There are also a few hundred injured people.
Over 2000 homes were destroyed.

The people who live in Joblin didn’t had much time to leave the city or find a good place to shelter, since they were warned only 20 minutes before the tornado arrived.
With this kind of storm, it’s very common to be warned this late.

The storm cut a path of 6 miles long and 0.6 miles wide destroying almost 30% of the city.
A temporary morgue has been set up at the Missouri southern state university and a local concert hall now serves as a shelter for people who have lost their homes.

Last Sunday 46 tornadoes were reported in seven states. The tornado in Joplin was by far the deadliest. A few weeks ago, a serie of hurricanes sowed death and destruction in a large area in the southern United States. Over 350 people were killed by those tornadoes.

Alvast bedankt.

[Geriananas]

Eventjes snel (dus niet alle, maar de grootste, fouten zijn er uit):

On the 22nd of may, a tornado passed through Joblin, a city in the state of Missouri in America.
So far, 116 people have lost their lives to this tornado and the death count is still rising since there may be more people stuck underneath collapsed houses.
There are also a few hundred injured people.
Over 2000 homes were destroyed.

People living in Joblin didn’t have enough/sufficient time to leave the city or find a good place to shelter, because they were warned only 20 minutes before the tornado arrived.
With this kind of storm, it’s very common to be warned this late.

The storm cut a 6 mile long path which was 0.6 miles wide destroying nearly 30% of the city.
A temporary morgue has been set up at the Missouri southern state university and a local concert hall now serves as a shelter for people who have lost their homes.

Last Sunday 46 tornadoes were reported in seven states. The tornado in Joplin was by far the deadliest. A few weeks ago, a serie of hurricanes sowed death and destruction in a large area in the southern United States. Over 350 people were killed by those tornadoes.

[jellenl]

Bedankt voor het 'even snel' verbeteren. Heb de meeste puntjes die je hebt veranderd maar even meegenomen (want bij jou staan de dingen vaak net even wat handiger/beter).
Dus bedankt voor de reactie.