Engelse tekst

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A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man by James Joyce. The story goes about Stephen Dedalus and he lives in Ireland. His mother is a strictly religious woman. The uncle of Stephen lives also in the same house. When Stephen is olders he goes to a boarding school. Other children bullied Stephen a lot. Stevens parent are so poor that he can’t go to the boarding school any time longer. They move to Blackrock. In Blackrock goes Stephen to a new boarding school. But he has no friends and is a bit shy.
After school Stephen visits hookers, this is a hobby of Stephen. During a sermon of the vicar about the hell, he decides to improve his life.
Stephen is going to the university. Stephen develops his own ideas about how people think. And the end of the story he leaves Ireland.

Stephen Dedalus: quiet, shy, own world.
Emma Clere: Girlfriend Stephen.
Charles: Uncle, walking, dies early.

How is Stephen going to the university? He comes from a very poor family, so he had not enough money to pay his tuition.

Why don’t we know something about Emma Clere (the girl who loves Stephen)? There is not much information about the girl who Stephen loved so much.

Stephen is a quiet guy. In his spare time he goes to the hookers. And after a time he realized that it is not good what he is doing. Who helped him?

Stephen smiled again in answer to the smile which he could not see on the priest’s shadowed face, its image or spectre only passing rapidly across his mind as the low discreet accent fell upon his ear. He gazed calmly before him at the waning sky, glad of the cool of the evening and of the faint yellow glow which hid the tiny flame kindling upon his cheek.

[maria kurdi]

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ik gebruik deze voor turks maar je kan het ook voor andere talen gebruiken ik weet dat jet een beetje laat is maar misschien heb je in de toekomst er iets aan.

[DAH]

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Zou iemand de Engelse tekst kunnen controleren op spelfouten en grammaticafouten?

A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man by James Joyce. The story goes about Stephen Dedalus and he lives in Ireland. His mother is a strictly religious woman. The uncle of Stephen lives also in the same house. When Stephen is older he goes to a boarding school. Other children bully Stephen a lot. Stephen's parent are so poor that he can’t go to the boarding school any longer. They move to Blackrock. In Blackrock Stephen goes to a new boarding school. But he has no friends and is a bit shy.
After school Stephen visits hookers, this is a hobby of Stephen. During a sermon of the vicar about the hell, he decides to improve his life.
Stephen is goes to the university. Stephen develops his own ideas about how people think. And in the end [of the story] he leaves Ireland.

Stephen Dedalus: quiet, shy, own world.
Emma Clere: Girlfriend of Stephen/Stephen's girlfriend.
Charles: Uncle, walking, dies early.

How does Stephen get to go to the university? He comes from a very poor family, so he has not enough money to pay his tuition.

Why don’t we know something about Emma Clere (the girl who loves Stephen)? There is not much information about the girl who Stephen loved so much.

Stephen is a quiet guy. In his spare time he goes to the hookers. And after a while he realized that what he is doing is not good. Who helped him?

Stephen smiled again in answer to the smile which he could not see on the priest’s shadowed face, its image or spectre only passing rapidly across his mind as the low discreet accent fell upon his ear. He gazed calmly before him at the waning sky, glad of the cool of the evening and of the faint yellow glow which hid the tiny flame kindling upon his cheek.

Ik heb enkele dingen aangepast/verbeterd. Ik merk soms een nederlandse zinopbouw.
Een tip: Schrijf consistent in één tijd, tenzij het nodig is om een andere tijd te gebruiken. Je begint met present tense, dan gebruik je weer een past tense, waar het helemaal niet nodig is (vergeleken met de rest van je verhaal). Probeer in één tijd te blijven, dus alleen present of alleen past tense gebruiken, tenzij anders nodig.

[maria kurdi]

Stephen is goes to the university.

is fout!

Stephen goes to the university. is en goes kan niet samen

[maria kurdi]

How does Stephen going to the university? is ook fout

How does stephen go to the univeristy?
or
How is Stephen going to the university?

het verschil is de tijd.

[DAH]

Ik heb de 'does...going' over het hoofd gezien
Slecht... -_-