Help, kan iemand naar de grammatica (tijden) kijken? (Engels)

[Gothic]

So finally, we were in London. We, teenagers, without parents, in a big city. But we couldn’t enjoy those thoughts for to long, we were too tired, because we didn’t slept at all the night before. And everybody needed to go to the bad room. So Mr Bronsgeest thought he knew toilets, somewhere in the Hyde park, where we got out of the busses. So we walked across the Hyde park and when we finally arrived by the toilets, we saw that they were closed. So we had to walk back the long way and we still didn’t go to the bad room. Then we also had to wait for the assignments and instructions. And we needed it bad to find a toilet at that time. But happily the teachers told us that there was almost at every corner a Mac Donalds. And that’s were we went, when we got the assignments. We were far away from home in London and the first thing we went to was the Mac Donalds…

After that, we were headed to BP. The famous Palace we have seen on television like a thousand times. But now we could see it for real. I expected a lot from it, but it wasn’t that special. There was a big statue in front of it with a big fountain. So we took pictures, like real tourists and we hoped to see the changing of the guard. But too bad, it didn’t happen. While we were looking at BP some guy with a camera walked to us and gave us a CD of BS. He wanted to film us, while we would say something nice about B. Well I’m not really a fan, let’s say I kind of hate Britney, but for a CD, which costs in Holland about 40 Guldens, I can lie. So we told the guy how much we loved Britney. Then we took the subway and showed up on time by Piccadilly circus. We had to report two times this trip, so the teachers knew we were still alive. At Piccadilly circus we told the story about Britney and when v Gendt heard we got the CD of Britney he almost begged me to give my CD to him, so he had a nice present for his daughter. Well I listened the CD at home, and I was glad I could give it away.

Then we went to the museum. The teachers told us it was a nice place to go to. So we went. We were already really tired. And there we had to walk. Every place we could sit, we did sit. Are feet were tired. Well some things were kind of nice. We have seen mummies and there was a big library. After we had seen enough we looked for a bus and when we sat, we didn’t move for some time. Finally, rest. We drove around in London, until we saw we were somewhere out of the centre. So we got out, walked to the nearest subway and we got back to the place the bus would leave, Hyde park. When we arrived there on time of course, we heard that a group was missing. That was not really unexpected, in every group are some stupid people. After some phone calls we got complete after all and we could leave London to go back to Gouda. The way back was not that nice. We at least, we could sit. We didn’t slept until we arrived by the ferry. The way back to France was terrible. It was cold. We the boat moved too much. A few people threw up and nobody did feel that well. After an hour, we had to go back to the bus and the ride home continued. Some people slept some time, others were awake the whole way. We drove a few hours and then we saw Gouda again. A lot of parents were waiting for us. Even though the way back was rough, we really enjoyed the London trip. We had a lot of fun, and don’t mind to go back some time. The trip to London was a great success.


het is een verslag van de Londenreis. Ik moet er een spreekbeurt over houden, het enige wat ik niet zeker weet zijn de tijden, woorden die verkeerd zijn geschreven enzo maken niet uit, zolang tijden maar kloppen en grammatica...

*not again*

Ik ga er nu niet veel tijd in stoppen, dus maar kort:

to long -> too long
didn't slept -> didn't sleep (haven't slept is beter)
he knew toilets -> he knew of
by Piccadilly circus -> at Piccadilly circus
listened the CD -> listened to the CD
we did sit -> we sat down
Are feet were tired -> our feet were tired
We at least, -> but at least
didn’t slept -> didn't sleep
arrived by the ferry -> arrived with the ferry
We the boat moved too much ->


Ik zou hele delen kunnen herschrijven .. tijd = probleem

bad room -> bathroom .. als je wc bedoelt: loo

[edit: restroom kan ook]

Gothic schreef:
So finally, we were in London. We, teenagers, without parents, in a big city. However, we couldn’t enjoy those thoughts for too long, we were too tired, because we haven’t slept at all the night before. And everybody needed to go to the loo. Luckely, Mr Bronsgeest thought he knew of some toilets, somewhere in Hyde park, where we got out of the busses. So we walked across Hyde park and when we finally arrived at the toilets, we saw that they were closed. Consequently, we had to walk all the way back without finding anything. To make things worse, we also had to wait for the assignments and instructions .. still in the need of finding a toilet at this time. To our relieve, the teachers told us that there was almost a Mac Donalds at every corner. When we finally got the assignments, that's where we went of course. We were far away from home in London and the first thing we actually went to was the Mac Donalds..

Stuk 1.. nu moet ik weer wat anders doen

[Gothic]

******** schreef:
We the boat moved too much ->

tnx ... daarmee bedoelde ik dat de boot heel erg schommelde... er waren hoge golven dus de boot ging op en neer...

[M@rco]

Hier... een [hopelijk] verbeterde versie...

So finally, we were in London. We, teenagers, without parents, in a big city. But we couldn’t enjoy those thoughts for too long, we were too tired, because we hadn’t slept at all the night before. And everybody needed to go to the bathroom. Mr Bronsgeest thought he knew where to find toilets, somewhere in Hyde park, where we got out of the busses. So we walked across Hyde park, and when we finally arrived at the toilets, we saw that the toilets were closed. So we had to walk back that long way and we still hadn’t gone to the bathroom! Then we also had to wait for the assignments and instructions. And at that time, we all really needed to find a toilet badly. Luckily the teachers told us that there was a Mac Donalds at almost every corner. So that was were we went, after we got the assignments. We were in London, far away from home, and the first thing we went to was the Mac Donalds…

After that, we headed to BP. The famous Palace we had seen on television like a thousand times. But now we could see it for real. I expected a lot of it, but it wasn’t that special. There was a big statue in front of it with a big fountain. So we took pictures, like real tourists and we hoped to see the changing of the guards. But sadly, it didn’t happen. While we were looking at BP, some guy with a camera walked over to us and gave us a CD of BS. He wanted to film us saying something nice about B. Well I’m not really a fan, let’s say I kind of hate Britney, but for a CD, which costs about 20 Euros in Holland, I can lie. So we told the guy how much we loved Britney. Then we took the subway and arrived at Piccadilly circus on time. We had to report ourselves two times this trip, so the teachers knew we were still alive. At Piccadilly circus we told the story about Britney and when v Gendt heard we got the CD of Britney he almost begged me to give my CD to him, so he had a nice present for his daughter. Well I listened to the CD at home, and I was glad I could give it away.

Then we went to the museum. The teachers told us it was a nice place to go to. So we did. We already were really tired. And there, we had to walk. Every place we could sit, we did. Our feet were tired. Well some things were kind of nice. We have seen mummies and there was a big library. After we had seen enough we looked for a bus and when we sat, we didn’t move for some time. Finally, rest. We drove around in London, until we noticed we had left the centre of the city. So we got out of the bus, walked to the nearest subway and we got back to the place the bus would leave, Hyde park. When we arrived there, on time of course, we heard that a group was missing. That was not really unexpected, there are some stupid people in every group. After some phone calls, we finally got all back together and we could leave London to go back to Gouda. The trip back was not that nice. But at least, we could sit. We didn’t sleep until we arrived at the ferry. The way back to France was terrible. It was cold. The boat was rolling a lot [zegt het woordenboek..]. A few people threw up, and no one felt very well. After an hour, we had to go back to the bus and the ride home continued. Some people slept for some time, others were awake the whole time. We drove a few hours and then we finally saw Gouda again. A lot of parents were waiting for us. Even though the way back was rough, we really enjoyed the London trip. We had a lot of fun, and wouldn’t mind to go back some time. The trip to London was a great success.

Ik hoop dat alle grammaticale fouten eruit zijn...

[Gothic]

I love you both ... heel erg bedankt

[Vlooienband]

M@rco schreef:
So finally, we were in London. We, teenagers, without parents, in a big city. But we couldn’t enjoy those thoughts for too long, we were too tired, because we hadn’t slept at all the night before. And everybody needed to go to the bathroom. Mr Bronsgeest thought he knew where to find the toilets, somewhere in Hyde park, where we got out of the busses. So we walked across Hyde park, and when we finally arrived at the toilets, we saw that the toilets were closed. So we had to walk that long way back and we still hadn’t gone to the bathroom! Then we also had to wait for the assignments and instructions. And at that time, we all needed to find a toilet badly. Luckily the teachers told us that there was a Mac Donalds at almost every corner. So that was were we went, after we got the assignments. We were in London, far away from home, and the first thing we went to was the Mac Donalds…

After that, we headed to BP. The famous Palace we had seen on television like a thousand times. But now we could see it for real. I expected a lot of it, but it wasn’t that special. There was a big statue in front of it with a big fountain. So we took pictures, like real tourists and we hoped to see the changing of the guards. But sadly, it didn’t happen. While we were looking at BP, some guy with a camera walked over to us and gave us a CD of BS. He wanted to film us saying something nice about B. Well I’m not really such a fan, let’s say I kind of hate Britney, but for a CD, which costs about 20 Euros in Holland, I can lie. So we told the guy how much we loved Britney. Then we took the subway and arrived at Piccadilly circus on time. We had to report ourselves two times this trip, so the teachers knew we were still alive. At Piccadilly circus we told the story about Britney and when v Gendt heard we got the CD of Britney he almost begged me to give my CD to him, so he had a nice present for his daughter. Well I listened to the CD at home, and I was glad I could give it away.

Then we went to the museum. The teachers told us it was a nice place to go to. So we did. We already were really tired. And there, we had to walk. Every place we could sit, we did. Our feet were tired. Well some things were kind of nice. We have seen mummies and there was a big library. After we had seen enough we looked for a bus and when we sat, we didn’t move for some time. Finally, rest. We drove around in London, until we noticed we had left the centre of the city. So we got out of the bus, walked to the nearest subway and we got back to the place the bus would leave, Hyde park. When we arrived there, on time of course, we heard that a group was missing. That was not really unexpected, there are some stupid people in every group. After some phone calls, we finally got all back together and we could leave London to go back to Gouda. The trip back was not that nice. But at least, we could sit. We didn’t sleep until we arrived at the ferry. The way back to France was terrible. It was cold. The boat was rolling a lot [zegt het woordenboek..]. A few people threw up, and no one felt very well. After an hour, we had to go back to the bus and the ride home continued. Some people slept for some time, others were awake the whole time. We drove a few hours and then we finally saw Gouda again. A lot of parents were waiting for us. Even though the way back was rough, we really enjoyed the London trip. We had a lot of fun, and wouldn’t mind to go back some time. The trip to London was a great success.

een paar verbeteringen, maar toch

[Gothic]

Als het jullie interesseerd, ik had er een 8 voor

[M@rco]

Gefeliciteerd

[Vlooienband]

Gothic schreef:
Als het jullie interesseerd, ik had er een 8 voor

Goed zo!!