Tragic end of humanity

[Bada Bing]

There they came, over the hill.
Jumping like outrageous madmen.
The leader saw us and spinned around,
to attack his followers without a warning.

Never since the break of dawn,
had there been such a betrayal.
We stood silently and watched,
while the madmen killed eachother

All the women turned as one and walked away.
For it was the womens that stood and watched.
But our eyes couldn't see tragedy no more.
And our arms couldn't fight tiranny once again.

Damned let them be! we shouted.
For no more shall any man,
ever pass the door to our home.
Or cross the path to our hearts.

je engels

hij is wel geinig

[Bada Bing]

wat is er met mijn engels?

gaar schreef op 24-02-2004 @ 15:11:
There they came, over the hill.
Jumping like outrageous madmen.
The leader saw us and spinned (span? spun? maardatweetiknietzeker ) around,
to attack his followers without a warning.

Never since the break of dawn,
had there been such a betrayal.
We stood silently and watched,
while the madmen killed each other

All the women turned (around?) as one and walked away.
For it was the women that stood and watched.
But our eyes couldn't see tragedy any more.
And our arms couldn't fight tiranny once again.

Damned let them be! we shouted.
For no more shall any man,
ever pass the door to our home.
Or cross the path to our hearts.

Paar foutjes verbeterd, en verder snap ik dit gedeelte niet echt:

All the women turned as one and walked away.
For it was the womens that stood and watched.

2x women?

En daarbij vind ik het niet zo'n geweldig gedicht, het loopt niet lekker..