First Kiss

[AnTaRTiCa]

You took my breath away with that first kiss,
You took me by surprise.
I had not expected it,
Or that look in your eyes.

Our lips first touch,
Send shivers down my back.
Gently running you fingers through my hair,
My hands touch your face for that first time.

Our tongues meet, twirling and dancing.
Touching and caressing.
Slowly our lips meshing with each other,
Sucking and licking, pressing and rubbing.

My hands run up under your shirt, across you chest,
My fingertips dancing against your skin.
Your gentle embrace, the warmth of your skin.
I’ll never forget how you took my breath away with that first kiss.

[SounD]

Heet gedichtje hoor

Jammer van de foutjes erin

Ik ga er vanuit dat dit stuk niet verleden tijd is vanwege het touch ipv touched.
>Our lips first touch,
>Send shivers down my back.
Sends shivvers
>Gently running you fingers through my hair,
your fingers
>My hands touch your face for that first time.
for the first time klinkt beter

>Slowly our lips meshing with each other,
Voor mijn gevoel is er iets mis met deze zin
volgens mij is het werkwoord
to mesh in
dan mis ik het "in" in de zin.

[Lindansje]

mooi verwoord

ik zie het helemaal voor

[Horror Kitty]

jouw gedichten/verhaaltjes zijn net films, zo levendig verteld dat ik t gewoon zie gebeuren

vind deze iets minder, maar hij heeft toch wel wat