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Hatters Castle
, boekbespreking #1 Jeroen Pruijsers 404


in the lowlands of scottland stood a building.
it was the castle of the family brodie , dad brodie was a very strict man , and he was the big
boss in and arround the house , he had also a realy big reputation in the village where they lived.
he was called james brodie.
he was very mad at his daughter mary , beacuse she was after six weeks not the best of her
class anymore , and his other daughter mary was fell in love with a boy, but father don't liked the boy ,
who was called denis , and he had forbid her to see denis
he also had a son , called mathew , who was going to sail to inda , cause his father want to make a man
of his boy. he would be away from home for five years , what his girlfriend called agnes don't like.
father brodie had a small hat shop , where mary had to work .
salesman perry said she looking ill , and said to her she have to visit a doctor.
the doctor said she was pregnant , ashe asked denis to mary her , cause the baby will come
already over five years.
denis went for a talk to father james brodie , to ask why mary don't may see him , then james
brodie called him names , and want to hit denis , but denis avade him , so james hitted the wall
very hardly , and had to go to a doctor.
mary was now not allowed toleave the house , so she can't meet denis.
after six weeks sitting home , she would to kill herself , because she daught denis was forgotten
her , but then she got a letter from denis.
he wrote that he had bought a cottage , and will take her tot here at newyearseve.
a few days after that , her mother saw she was pregnant , and said it to dad , she had to leave
the house immediately.
she would go to denis parent's house , and had to walk 3 miles , but she had to walk to a forest by
night , so she get lost.the birth was began , in the middle of a forest , and she walked to a cottage.
she was very tired , and a few minutes later , an older lady found her , and called a doctor
immediately.the farmer was taking them to the hospital.
denis , who don't know of everything was going on , died by a incidient by a train. mary was still
very ill , and her baby died already and the hole town konws about it , and brodies reputation was
ruined. his hat shopn was not running well , cause a gigantic hat shop was opened in the little town.
brodie received a letter from his son matt , that he came to home. mother , who feels very ill , but
don't can go to a doctor , cause their haven't money anymore likes that. mad came home and had
inmidelately a quarill with his dad , he was going out with his girlfriend said matt to his mum ,and lent
the last money , but he wasn't going out whit is girlfriend , cause the relationship was broken , ands he
spent the money by drink. he was very drunk , and he saw his father in the town , and he getted his
pistal and want to shoot his dad , but he missed.
mother was going to a doctor now , and the doctor said she had cancer and die within six months.
then , brodies had-shop was finaly closed. he was ruined.then their mum died , in only one week.
only two days later , father had found a new girl , called nancy , brodie has taken a new job , as clerk
by the shipyard. matt and nancy had promised to each other to go out an evening . but matt had aslo
a new job , on south america , and nancy ( the girlfriend of his father ) had decided she would go
with math.mary came back to the house , and nessie was very happy with that.may goes to dr
renwick , and told him to her father pushed nessie up to win a prize at school , she must learn every
day , but she don''t liked that. dr renwick had goes to her school , and told her teacher about
it. grierson , the concurrant of nessie had win the schoolexamination , and brodie wasn't very
happy whit that. nessie had hang herself , and now brodie hasn't anybody more , cause mary
was fell in love witj dr renwick.




me spellingscontrole liet me in de steek , en deed alleen nog het nederlands , wie kan mij helpen please ?

[Trimm Trabb]

videoband schreef op 26-11-2003 @ 07:35:
Hatters Castle
, boekbespreking #1 Jeroen Pruijsers 404


in the lowlands of scotland stood a building.
it was the castle of the family Brodie. Father brodie was a very strict man , and he was the big boss in and around the house.
He also had a really big reputation in the village where they lived.
He was called james brodie.
He was very mad at his daughter Mary , because after six weeks she wasn't the best of her class anymore, and his other daughter Mary had fallen in love with a boy, but father didn't like the boy ,
who was called Denis , and he had forbidden her to see denis.
He also had a son , called mathew , who was going to sail to india , cause his father wanted to make a man of his boy. He would be away from home for five years , Which his girlfriend Agnes didn't like.
Father brodie had a small hat shop , where mary had to work .
salesman perry said she looked ill , and said to her she had to visit a doctor.
the doctor said she was pregnant , ashe asked denis to mary her , cause the baby would come over five years.
denis went to talk to father james brodie , to ask why mary wasn't allowed to see him , then james brodie called him names , and wanted to hit denis , but denis could escape him , so james hit the wall very hard , and had to go to a doctor.
Mary wasn't allowed to leave the house now, so she couldn't see denis.
after six weeks sitting at home , she wanted to kill herself , because she thought denis had forgotten about her , but then she got a letter from denis.
he wrote that he had bought a cottage , and would take her there on newyears eve.
a few days after that , her mother saw she was pregnant , and said it to dad , she had to leave
the house immediately.
she would go to denis parent's house , and had to walk 3 miles , but she had to walk to a forest by night , so she got lost.
She got into labour, in the middle of a forest , and she walked to a cottage.
she was very tired , and a few minutes later , an older lady found her , and called a doctor immediately.the farmer was taking them to the hospital.
denis , who didn't know of anything that was going on , died in a trainaccident. mary was still very ill and her baby died soon and the hole town knew about it , and brodies reputation was
ruined. his hat shop was not running well , because a gigantic hat shop was opened in the little town.
brodie received a letter from his son matt , that he was coming home. mother , who felt very ill , couldn't go to a doctor , because they didn't have any money. Matt came home and immidiately started having a row with his father, Maat said to his mum that he was going out with his girlfriend ,and lent
the last money , but he wasn't going out with his girlfriend , because they had split up and he spent the money on drinks.
He got very drunk , and he saw his father in the town , and he got out his pistol and wanted to shoot his dad , but he missed.
mother was going to a doctor now , and the doctor said she had cancer and was going to die within six months.
then , brodies hat-shop was finally closed. he was ruined.then within a week their mom died.
only two days later , father had found a new girl , called nancy. brodie had taken a new job , as a clerk by the shipyard. matt and nancy had promised to each other to go out one evening . but matt had also found a new job in south america , and nancy ( the girlfriend of his father) had decided she would go
with him. Mary came back to the house , and nessie was very happy with that.may went to dr renwick , and told him that her father pushed nessie up to win a prize at school , she must learn every day , but she didn't like that. Dr renwick went to her school , and told her teacher about it. grierson, the one competing against nessie had won the school examination , and brodie wasn't very happy whit that. nessie had hung herself , and now brodie didn't have anyone anymore, because mary
had fallen in love with dr renwick.

Nou ik heb de grootste fouten eruit gehaald,verkeerde werkwoordsvormen enzo, maar de zinsopbouw is nog steeds erg slecht. Je kan ook proberen om eens andere woorden te gebruiken...En hoofdletters en punten zouden ook wel handig zijn.

[Konijn]

videoband schreef op 26-11-2003 @ 07:35:
Hatters Castle
, boekbespreking #1 Jeroen Pruijsers 404


in the lowlands of Scotland stood a building.
it was the castle of the family brodie , father brodie was a very strict man , and he was the big
boss in and around the house , he also had a really big reputation in the village where they lived.
he was called james brodie.
he was very mad at his daughter mary , because after six weeks she was not the best of her
class anymore , and his other daughter mary had fallen in love with a boy, but father didn't like the boy ,
who was called denis , and he had forbidden her to see denis
he also had a son , called mathew , who was going to sail to inda , because his father wants to make a man
of his boy. he was going to be away from home for five years , something his girlfriend called agnes didn't like.
father brodie had a small hat shop , where mary had to work .
salesman perry said she was looking ill , and said to her she had to visit a doctor.
the doctor said she was pregnant , and she asked denis to marry her , because the baby would come
in five months (neem ik aan ) .
denis went for a talk to father james brodie , to ask why mary wasn't allowed see him , then james
brodie called him names , and he wanted to hit denis , but denis avoided him , so james hit the wall
very hardly , and had to go to a doctor.
mary was now not allowed to leave the house , so she couldn't meet denis.
after six weeks sitting home , she wanted to kill herself , because she thought denis had forgotten
her , but then she got a letter from denis.
he wrote that he had bought a cottage , andwanted to take her there at New Year's Eve .
a few days after that , her mother saw she was pregnant , and told her dad , and Mary had to leave
the house immediately.
she wanted go to denis' parent's house , and had to walk 3 miles , but she had to walk to a forest by
night , so she got lost. the birth began , in the middle of a forest , and she walked to a cottage.
she was very tired , and a few minutes later , an older lady found her , and called a doctor
immediately. the farmer took them to the hospital.
denis , who didn't know of everything was going on , died by an incident by a train. mary was still
very ill , and her baby died already and the whole town knew about it , and brodies reputation was
ruined. his hat shop was not running well , because a gigantic hat shop was opened in the little town.
brodie received a letter from his son matt , that he would come home. mother , whofelt very ill , but
couldn't go to a doctor , because they didn't have money anymore likes that. matt came home and had
a quarill with his dad immediately , he was going out with his girlfriend matt told his mum ,and lent
the last money , but he wasn't going out whit is girlfriend , because the relationship was broken , and he
spent the money drinking . he was very drunk , and he saw his father in the town , and he got his
pistal and wanted to shoot his dad , but he missed.
mother was going to a doctor now , and the doctor said she had cancer and she was going to die within six months.
then , brodies hat shop was closed finally. he was ruined. then their mum died , in only one week.
only two days later , father had found a new girl , called nancy , brodie had taken a new job , as clerk
by the shipyard. matt and nancy had promised to each other to go out one evening . but matt had
a new job also , in south america , and nancy ( the girlfriend of his father ) had decided she would go
with matt .mary came back to the house , and nessie was very happy with that. mary went to dr
renwick , and told him that her father pushed nessie up to win a prize at school , she had to learn every
day , but she didn't like that. dr renwick went to her school , and told her teacher about
it. grierson , the concurrant of nessie had won the schoolexamination , and brodie wasn't very
happy whit that. nessie hung herself , and now brodie hadn't got anybody anymore , because mary
had fallen in love with dr renwick.


me spellingscontrole liet me in de steek , en deed alleen nog het nederlands , wie kan mij helpen please ?

Ehm, voor zover ik alles begreep heb ik de spelfouten en foute tijden er uit gehaald, er zitten vast nog heel veel fouten in, maar goed.. (alles staat nu in de verleden tijd, zoals je begonnen was).
Gebruik voor de verandering punten ipv alles aan elkaar te plakken met komma's, en hoofdletters zou ook handig zijn!!

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dank u , jullie zijn geweldig , k heb m net effe uitgeprint en ik krijg binnenkort een cijfer terug

hartstikke dank jullue welullie zijn