engelstalig gedicht

[botulismf]

hier dan ook maar mijn enige engelstalige gedicht:


I paint the sky a violent blue
The sunlight finds it's way around me
I swiftly close the door behind me
And try to think of things to do

I lose myself thinking of you
You are so cruel, but you're so like me
You always claimed that it was likely
That I would end up just like you

Now mommy was so pretty and she
Didn't seem to notice that she
Never was the one to blame

And now you say that life's a game
She played and lost - I think I'll maybe
Forever hang my head in shame

heb betere van je gelezen

[clantestino]

vind t begin matig...maar daarna erg goed, zo bij je laatste twee strofes. dat "mommy"past er geweldig in, het geeft het geheel een erg goede sfeer. vind ook je rijm in dit deel mooi.

ja...vind t zeker wel wat hebben